Version 1 (Initial Draft):
Some people throw away plastic bottles. They go into the ocean. Animals eat them. This kills the animals.
Version 2 (Revised Content):
The improper disposal of plastic bottles leads to severe environmental consequences. These bottles often end up in our oceans, where marine wildlife mistakenly consumes them, resulting in fatal outcomes.
Taslak metin ile gözden geçirilmiş metin arasındaki fark göz önüne alındığında, ikinci versiyonun oluşturulmasına yol açan en olası geri bildirim ne olmuştur?
A) "Your language is too informal and simple. Try to use more sophisticated vocabulary and complex sentence structures to make your writing more academic."
B) "You need to add more pictures and visual aids to make the text more engaging for the reader."
C) "The text is too long and contains unnecessary information; try to shorten it significantly."
D) "Focus only on land pollution, as ocean pollution is a completely different topic."
E) "Describe the different types of animals affected by plastic pollution in more detail."